<p style="text-align: justify;"><img style="width: 808px; height: 61px; margin-left: auto; margin-right: auto; float: none;" src="https://info.compassedu.hk/sucai/content/1679471298570/1679471298570.png" width="808" height="61" /></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><a href="http://www.kelabdiet.com/adviser_16318_1" target="_blank" rel="noopener"><span style="text-decoration: underline; color: #1890ff;">史雯娟</span></a></p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #666666;">简介：2021年度&ldquo;妙笔生花奖&rdquo;，擅长商科和文社科方向写作，具有丰富文书写作经验及深厚的英语语言功底，以专业及个性化的文书帮助学员斩获LSE、IC、 HKU、NUS等名校offer</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">在准备文书素材的时候，很多同学会发现，面对跨申或者和本科专业联系不大的专业时，<strong>自己的校内外经历与申请项目匹配度并不高或甚至完全不匹配</strong>。在这种情况下，如何从有限的经历中挖掘出与目标项目适配的部分，与上下文形成逻辑上紧密的连结则成为了文书整体完成度的关键。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">今天#<strong>心动的文书</strong>#栏目，将与大家探寻如何从新的角度挖掘与申请专业相关度不高的素材，以将personal statement形成思路通顺合理的整体。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">01 正反倒置，主客角度转换</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>申请方向：教育类</strong></li> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>素材方向：传媒类</strong></li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">中文素材</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">我印象最深的是在学习数字绘画的经历......首先是<strong>软件的使用</strong>.....在解决软件方面的瓶颈后，<strong>造型美感</strong>又成为了新的课题&hellip;&hellip;这段时间里对于<strong>画作完成度</strong>我也有了新的理解&hellip;&hellip;从这段经历中我所学的不只是数字绘画理论和技法，更重要的让我明白了&hellip;&hellip;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">思路分享</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #eb5757;"><strong>不论是PS的使用，还是造型美感与画作完成度，都偏向传媒中的媒体设计方面，与教育教学不相关</strong>。</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">单从学生的这段经历来看，特别是感悟部分，提纲的表述更偏向于传媒领域，而非教育领域。但鉴于这是该学生的学习数字绘画的经历，<strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">不妨转换思路，将客体（授课老师）和主体（该学生）的角色进行交换</span></strong>，弱化原提纲中&ldquo;我&rdquo;对绘画部分的技巧学习和画作理解，而把客体作为主体来思考，<strong>反思授课老师的教学模式和方法对于&ldquo;我&rdquo;学习的作用影响以及&ldquo;我&rdquo;（未来教育行业从业者）从老师的教学中得到的对教育教学的了解与启发</strong>，与申请的教育教学类方向相匹配，也与下文的教育机构实习（该授课老师教学方法的实践）形成逻辑上的连接。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">英文成稿</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: center;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">When attending a CG Art course, Luobichengqi, given by ZHANG Lu, I was deeply impressed by his classroom mode <strong>as he explained complicated painting theories in an easy-to-understand approach with graphic examples</strong>. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">【授课老师（客体）的教学模式作为学生理解教学方式的点】</span></strong> Simultaneously, to deepen our understanding of painting techniques and familiarize us with different modeling design styles, Mr. ZHANG introduced the representative works of famous masters like Craig Mullins, John Park, and Jaime Jones, from which my painting skills and aesthetic level were greatly improved. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">【对授课老师例举法的进一步阐述】</span></strong> I valued this learning experience, for it <strong>developed my ability to explain profound theories in simple language</strong>, and, meanwhile, <strong>exposed me to a classroom mode with high teaching efficiency and quality, which I would like to apply in teaching</strong>. <span style="color: #eb5757;"><strong>【由授课老师的教学方式联想到如何在自己的教学过程中提高教学质量】</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">02 另辟蹊径，拓展研究应用</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>申请方向：供应链管理</strong></li> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>素材方向：企业管理（电商）</strong></li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">中文素材</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">在本科学习过程中，我对社会化媒体情境下用户创造内容激励机制研究值得一提&hellip;&hellip;<strong>我设计出适用于UGC背景下的激励模型</strong>......（模型设计过程）我明白了我能<strong>把一个领域的理论成果应用到另一个领域中</strong>，也算是创新&hellip;&hellip;此次研究也很大程度上促进了我模型设计和数据分析的能力。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">思路分享</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">学生的这段经历着重在描述模型设计与建立的过程，与供应链及供应链管理的联系都不是很大</span></strong>；鉴于提纲中&ldquo;将一个领域的成果应用到另一个领域中&rdquo;的学生的感悟，从应用层面思考该模型的新的应用方式也不失为一种写作方向。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">依托这种想法，<strong>在英文写作中将建模的前后经历省去，着重从应用面书写对该模型的理解和感悟，从该模型在企业管理中的应用拓宽到供应链中对上下游企业的管理中以提高整个供应链的效率，以此形成从供应链知识面了解</strong> -- 供应链管理面应用的能力，从管理面更贴合申请专业。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">英文成稿</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: center;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Simultaneously, supply chain management, in my view, hinges on effectively managing the supply chain itself and the people involved in this process. <span style="color: #eb5757;"><strong>（供应链管理的管理面）</strong></span> Apart from my knowledge of supply chain, I have learned <strong>to manage people and affairs through my research on the incentive mechanism of user-created content in the context of social media</strong>. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">（由供应链知识面转向管理面）</span></strong>In this research, I constructed an incentive model applicable to the UGC background based on the Potter-Lawler comprehensive incentive model with the application of modern tools like SPSS and Amos. Having had a fundamental understanding of <strong>the incentive model that is widely applied in corporate management, I deem that it can also be utilized to motivate upstream and downstream enterprises in the whole supply chain, including suppliers, transportation agents, and distribution firms, to closely cooperate for the improvement of supply chain efficiency. <span style="color: #eb5757;">（从该激励模型在企业管理中的应用，引申到供应链的应用）</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">03 互补互足，专业性叠加技能性</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>申请方向：医学（康复治疗）</strong></li> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>素材方向：偏文献研究与分析</strong></li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">中文素材</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">最让我印象深刻的一次学习研究是毕业课题重复经颅磁刺激在脊髓损伤后神经病理性疼痛的研究进展......(研究方向确定+资料收集分析+论文撰写) 在学习《脊髓损伤康复》课程时便对脊髓损伤相关知识产生了浓厚的兴趣......通过阅读相关资料发现......关于重复经颅磁刺激治疗脊髓损伤后神经病理性疼痛的相关文献却较少。因此，这对我的<strong>综合分析、逻辑推理</strong>能力提出了极高的要求，这也会极大的提高后期论文写作的难度。我<strong>独立使用中国知网、万方、SinoMed、Pubmed、web of science数据库</strong>，通过使用......等<strong>关键词进行文献检索</strong>，并<strong>根据纳入与排除标准进行文献的筛选</strong>，最终筛选出了三十余篇论文，通过分析归纳，我确定了文章总体框架，最终从......选择四个方面入手，分点阐述相关内容，完成了<strong>综述论文的撰写</strong>。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">思路分享</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">学生的类似科研经历，由于都是对某方面研究的一些分析，而不是自己具体的产出，且侧重点在于文献研究、收集及分析上，在这样的情况下，基于学生在康复治疗领域有一定的工作经验以展现其专业能力，就不再着过多笔墨去阐述该学生相较下专业度不够的本科经历，而是将重点摆在类似研究经历中体现出的技能型优势来展现学生在未来研究生学习、工作甚至终身学习方面的可持续性，与上文的专业性能力形成互补，综合体现学生的全方面的能力。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">英文成稿</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">From a more comprehensive aspect, I believe that therapists with promising prospects should keep abreast with theoretical and technical development in the rehabilitation field, which requires them to <strong>possess high-level research skills and learning competence</strong> to better apply the latest achievements to improve treatment effectiveness and efficiency. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">(在前几段说明作为治疗师的专业能力之后，这一段开头点明对其在其他能力方面的要求，接下来通过本科研究阐明)</span></strong> Hence, during my undergraduate studies, <strong>I threw myself into assorted projects to sharpen my integrated research skills and broaden my horizons</strong>. From my module projects..., more than updating my understanding of rehabilitation and corresponding treatment methods, I have been skillful in <strong>applying what I have acquired to practical use</strong>. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">(学以致用的能力)</span></strong> Moreover, it is also worth mentioning that in my graduation design, I conducted in-depth research on the advances in the application of repetitive transcranial magnetic stimulation (rTMS) in neuropathic pain after spinal cord injury, <strong>during which I took the strength of varied databases</strong> ... to gain data support for my research...Through research projects like these, <strong>I became more experienced in information collection, processing, and analysis, and had my logical thinking and analytical skills enhanced. <span style="color: #eb5757;">(技能方面的提升)</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: center;"><br /><img style="width: 808px; height: 188px; margin-left: auto; margin-right: auto; float: none;" src="https://info.compassedu.hk/sucai/content/1679471306979/1679471306979.png" width="808" height="188" /></p>